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[Utopia]

Nice but needs work

I can see alot of work that went into it. Unfortuately you needed to move the story along. That long drawn out sequence would work if it was a 2 hour long movie but this was a few minute short.

I just saw the Kirby one on the front page (kirby's dreamland or something) and I enjoyed that more. It kept things moving. And had some funny bits. But the over all polish was no where near as good.

Graphics arent the only thing.

You were trying to build suspence. You did a bit. You lingered too long on him trying to get away and put more work into it than was needed.

Always better to error on the side of too quick than too long. ( I dont mean the blams where they put a couple of slides up to see then its over) I mean in the story or the motions of the characters.

I would say if you trimmed it down by a 1/3rd it would be just right. Like the parts where they arms are trying to get him or he is running or he is struggling. He ran away from them about 4-5 times? Just a couple would have been better.

Anyway would take to long to go over it point by point. But watch a few disney and 3.7 movies with good graphics and see how long they spend on each piece.

Thanks for putting the effort in. Nothing worse than watching something some one put no effort into and expected a 5 out of it.

Keep em coming.

Vuny responds:

Well Kirby wasn't that guy's original work. But thanks for the tips none the less. I ws trying to keep it in sync with the music, that's why it was so long. But the song was originaly a wopping 7 min long.

[Ear Ache Solution]

Ambivelent

Was a cute idea, great animation. Just the menu that popped up confused the issue. Took away from the toon.

I dont know what you were trying to say or do with it. You needed to clarify if it was an animator working on a project or it was the child changing his mood or what not.

Could have been a 4/5 only a 3/5 for me because of the menu thing.

Sometimes simplier is better.

Get too fancy and it takes away from the over all toon.

I did see all the hard work you put into it.

dancer4ever responds:

Yeah, the menu was because I as an animator didn't want to have to listen to a recording of myself or a kid screaming over and over and over and over again while I was testing out my animation. Really didn't have any other reason for being there, though I think it would be nice if you could mute kids crying/ screaming.

Thanks for the feedback!

[A Wonderful Leaf]

Good graphics, unfortunately the script trashes it

The part where it was just the leaf and scenery was pretty.

But the over all execution of the toon gimped a bit. Pretty much the script.

It was out side the box, different but wasnt really funny because a leaf could really never do that.

Another chap I was helping had the same problem. Good animator but bad script writer. He wanted to do something so off the wall that it became sort of stupid.

You need a bit of "realism" when you do a script. Bugs Bunny is so funny because of the basic plot line. Simple and some what realistic. IE hunter hunting rabbits in the forest. Becomes funny because Bugs fights back.

A leaf would never ever do something like this. I think you should have stayed with the beauty theme, you were trying to combine two things.

Have a squirrel play with the kid or such. Then maybe a pretty sunset.

The leaf fight was alright but then when you went to the police and the scientist it tanked.

Maybe just cut it off at baby getting dunked.

Frycek responds:

Oh, mate...you wrote a long review. To bad it wasn´t positiv. A overall rating: 3?, come on...Realism...well, maybe I try that some time. To short it down? Perhaps, I think that the police-doctor-part, is less great then the rest. But I wanted a ending. It cant just end with the leaf fighting the baby. I hope I´ll do something in your taste some day. Thanks for the comment...

[Flystrip 2]

oh no, the humanity!

Ahhhhhh. Thank ye. It was like a drink of water in a desert of blams.

That was pretty funny.

GUTOONs responds:

Thanks for the review,
GU

[Yes! It Doesn't!]

Its another math movie isnt it?

Its another one of those movies about complex math or sciece or possibly politics isnt it? Im saying that with out looking at the explanation.

The huge problem I have is someone with no knowledge of the subject matter cant get anything from it other than a random toon. Which some of them like.

But alas I expect more. Ye need to explain it better so people know what your talking about.

Sorry middle of the road for this one.

There was a pretty good one about atomic clocks. It wasnt boring but it was informative.

von-Brunk responds:

To be honest, there's absolutely NO hidden meanings in this. This is actually a protest against esoteric art which has some kind of political agenda mixed with it. What you see is what you see; There's no background gags or satires. It's literally a British gumball machine chasing Teddy Roosevelt's bust.

[Blockhead: Episode 6]

Booyah!

Thanks for mixing it up a bit. Having him interact with more people and have some more intellegent stuff (the fake interview) along with blockhead's random humor helped to balance it. The conscience isn't enough of a straight man to sustain the comic series alone. Um blockhead sort of overpowers him. Heh.

Humm some sort of sidekicky thing would work eh?

Heh.

Sweet.

The-Swain responds:

I can only have the Conscience get punked by Blockhead for so long before it becomes the same old thing (as per Ep.5, which I feared had too much of it). So, I left him out of the episode altogether save for a few, very important roles. I thought that it worked out nicely this time.

[Time Squad [Part 1]]

Booyah!

Just what blockhead needed. A good story. I fear the series was becoming a bit old because blockhead is uber random. But all the serious characters made it fresh and new.

Maybe anther regular character to be another straightman in the series would help.

Is blockhead ever going to have a girlie girl friend?

The-Swain responds:

A friend of mine, the one who did the voice of the Mad Scientist, drew me a picture of what he called "Blockbride, the Bride of Blockhead", but I fear that it would be just too bizzare to use.

And do not worry about the series. I'm changing a few of the rules to make it more diverse.

[The Saddest Song]

Good animation

Was funny,

I think some of the people will have problems with it because he's a "loser" instead of a happy ending.

But over all well exicuted.

stoners-lunchbox responds:

I can't say you're wrong on that one... On the other hand not all stories can finish with a happy ending... :P

Thanks for the feedback!