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[HACKware ep. 1]

Good start

Over all the script was decent and had funny moments.

Only thing I would say is work on your animation and drawing of coarse and the sound. The people doing the voices need to work on putting more expression into thier voices, so it fits the scene.

And sometimes you stay on something too long. Like the dancing barbershop song. Didnt have to do the whole thing. Or the robot fell over and sparks are flying. Stayed looking on that too long.

But over all you did good. It kept my attention. And I had fun watching it.

Keep em coming and get with some one who can teach you about art and animation to polish them.

Sudden-Flash responds:

Fear not! I was only starting to develope my skill and style during pre-production. for episode two, the graphics are much better (and all drawn with a mouse i might add).

[Take This]

I dont like clock movies

usally either. I dont like it when people start having an argument in general chat in a online world like EQ or WoW and I dont like it when they use toons to to have thier arguments either.

I dont appreciate crudity so even though I'm in agreement with you about the clock movies, it doesn't excuse the way you are handling this. This is immature and just plain wrong.

You should be going to them and talking about this stuff, not doing it 3rd hand view.

I rate each toon on its own merits. I didnt even consider the clock fight when I rated it. I gave it what it deserved.

[Ye Olde Sheriff Benson #7]

I once had hope that this would be interesting

but then I watched it, couldnt make it through the whole thing. Just sort of dragged on and on and on....

I guess this is where they tell the writer to show not tell. The trailer was very cool though.

[The Zero Dragon Ep.1]

hey better

Lol Im glad you decided not to give up on flash.

I rember your post on the forums how you felt like the world fell apart because your toon didnt make top scores.

Looks like you took some the advice I and others gave you.

And you made it to the front page. Ye are learning to work smarter not just harder. Putting your energy into what works.

The script was pretty good over all, only thing is it moves pretty slow sometimes.

The first part was good flow where he was talking to the teacher, but the second part was slow. Better to err on the side of going too fast than too slow.

3 seconds is okay for a pause, but 10 seconds is waaayyy too slow. In a dialogue situation. You might have some pauses, but not that many and not that long.

Alot of americans look at these. They tend to like faster moving things, although I know asians tend to consintrate on every single detail and item.

As to being perfect, I think your pretty close, just speed it up a bit.

Yep those that dont do animation are tougher than those that do. Because those that do it know how hard it can be. But you cant complain because they grade you tougher, they are there and will be apart of the mix. But even those people gave you good scores this time eh. See. eh eh.

heh.

[The History of Animation]

Yay.

And now we have the capasity to produce, hundreds of crappy quick flash toons not fit for human consumption! Woo hooo!

lol

Kind of like how the electric type writer made it possible to type k a million times.

Fortunately this is not one of the crappy toons.

Sound was a little hard to hear.

[The HATTA's Rant]

better

This one was better. You been selling out the last few toons. Giving the audiance what it wants instead of sticking to your core values. giving em the pervy humor instead of being classier. Thats selling out.

Glad to see the old foamy back.

I like your stuff. I cant watch the other stuff.

[Exotic Chocolates]

Aw come on John

I like your work, I got 3 of your toons on my site. This stuff and the bra bashing and lewd underwear is just selling out. You know the kids like the pervy stuff and your giving it to em.

You used to get on them about writing you emails to see Germaine nekked, now your a crowd pleaser.

Your too good an animator and writer to be doing stuff like this man.

The last Hatta Rant was better. Are you sort of hitting a dry spell?

email me if you need ideas.

Still a fan, but not of all the toons.

[GF - Silence Earthling!]

Funny

cheap animation but cute script. Made me chuckle.

[Nobodies Shorts #5]

Graphics good script needs work.

There's a saying, when you tell a joke, its funny if the other people are laughing. Not everyone is laughing.

The graphics are good, but the jokes were poor and pretty rude.

[Who Killed Ken Kutaragi]

Good animation, script needs work.

I can tell your one of those creative people that cant sit still and have new ideas popping into thier brain all the time.

The visual its self was terrific. The animation is tight and well done.

Your script needs work. You do too much random stuff. It gets boring after a while. Watch some old bugs bunny toons. They have a basic story line with a few gags thrown in. You tried to jam too much into one toon.

Shoot for a total of 4-5 minutes other wise it just drags on and on. I know you put a lot of hard work into it. You need to have a tighter simplier script for your hard work to not be wasted.

The opening scene about halloween parady was cute. And funny.

When you leave the story line and say this is like a that, (gag stuff) thats when it gets repetative and boring. I'd be glad to help on your script if you like. I already helped the guy that does block head with a script and another guy named Jamie who does a web comic with a script for his own toon.They both liked my stuff.

Cheers.

AceRaynor responds:

Thanks for giving criticisms. I'd never give up writing my own material, but thanks for the offer.